I left a lot of things out of the memoir; it’s only 26,000 words, short.
I left out (deliberately) sex, drugs, money, power, and many traumas. I left out various of my favorite stories. I retitled it.
I left out my parents’ names, the name of my home town, most of the schools I went to.
I left out the
anger rage, the feelings of victimization, almost any of the feelings except as trying to explain, in first person, in an semi-analytical voice, what happened to me.
I left out the more elaborate design, including footnotes in the first 2 major pieces and end notes in the last. (Changed it to footnotes throughout.) Part of the reason was that I was told early on that memoirs don’t have footnotes. Most may not; mine does.
I left out much of the trauma work detail. There’s a line “this sounds fast and easy. It wasn’t, it took me 10 years.” or something very close to that.
I left out long sentences.
I left out the years of failed relationships, with friends and lovers in any detail because the way I learned how to have successful relationships were the massive blunders I made, the failures I had, and the places I hugely f’d up.
I left out any literary or academic pretensions, I hope. The language thing is important to me.
Years ago,when I started Tech. Writing, I decided I wanted to write instructions to the standard of what I considered outstanding fiction writing. To me, a piece is wonderfully written when the words on paper disappear because I’m so caught up in what they communicate.
It isn’t that I can’t write with more complexity.
I could say:
This has continually gotten me in trouble with people who equate multi-syllabic words, many independent clauses with conjunctive adverbial clauses, and jargon as educated.
I don’t understand why it is MORE acceptable than:
This has gotten me in trouble with people who see elaborate sentences, structure, and lingo as educated.
What I wanted to do with the memoir was to create something easy to read so that people would focus on what I’m saying, rather than how I’m saying it.
If I did it well, the simple language will be MORE effective. Two people have said it works, one said I wrote a book for youngsters, so it obviously didn’t.
My planned audience is high school senior/college freshman.
We’ll see what the publisher says. Hopefully, he won’t want it rewritten.